Thursday, 13 May 2021

The big game.

   This week we have been learning to hook the readers attention.  I amed to use lots of alliteration
which is having a sentence that starts with two or more words that start with the same letter. We only had to write the hook.
Has my story hooked you in? Do you want to read more? I enjoyed peer assessing with my mate James.
I found it challenging to remember what I am doing for my success criteria.

Squelch I walked onto the wet soggy rugby field.

I was ready to play. The whistle blew and the game started. Youch! Ahhh! We were clashing heads and dropping the slippery ball. It was freezing cold. I was an ice block. Every tackle looked like a huge doggy pile. We were clashing, crashing and smashing. I was left with a banged up head.


4 comments:

  1. Kia ora Jakob I am Camille from St Mary’s School.
    I think you did great with writing a hook. It really hooked me!
    I think that you did a good job with making your hook very interesting. I see it has onomatipiea, adjectives, a simile and a metaphor! This is very impressive!
    Was writing this hook tricky?
    Please visit my blog!
    here
    Mā te wā
    Camille

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    1. Thank you camille!!! I took a lot of time trying to get lots of metaphors,adjectives,onomatopoeia,and similes. I didn't find it very tricky actually. Thanks heaps Jakob A

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  2. Kia ora Camille I am Sophia from St Mary’s School.
    I really liked how you used an onomatopoeia, simile, adjectives and a metaphor!
    I also think you did a great job with your writing hook, It really hooked me in!
    Did you find it tricky to write your hook?
    Please visit my blog
    here
    Mā te wā
    Sophia

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    1. Thank you sophia for that comment. I actually did not find it very tricky to do because it was just a short and easy hook. And I like doing that.Thanks lot's Jakob A

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